Friday, January 14, 2011

Free Crit Friday

It's Friday and you know what that means! Time for critiques!

If you have a query, two page synopsis or the first page of your manuscript that you'd like me to critique, leave it in the comments and I'll give it a go! Don't forget to include your email addy otherwise it makes it difficult to get in touch with you ;)

We've had a few success stories already - so let's keep that success rolling! I want ALL of my followers to have an awesome writing year! It's time for all of us to nab that agent and book deal!

Have a great weekend everyone!

9 comments:

Susie Sheehey said...

Thanks so much! Here's my query letter:

If you discovered your husband was a criminal, would you try to protect the love of your life, or would you turn him in? Which would you choose if protecting him could cost you your life, but turning him in could cost you your career?

In “Under the Covers,” DEA agent, Clara O’Cleary (deep undercover) strives to dismantle the notorious Irish Outfit, and must keep her professional life secret from her husband, Caleb. But as Clara dives further into her undercover case, Caleb shows heart-wrenching signs of infidelity, straining her once-passion enthralled marriage into a dysfunctional relationship. Clara utilizes her investigative skills and the support and humor of her girlfriends to uncover the truth of his infidelity. But she’s not prepared when she discovers Caleb has more dangerous secrets of his own, jeopardizing her undercover position, and her life. Now she must find how to save her case and keep from being targeted, while saving her marriage in the process.

“Under the Covers” is a completed 70,000 word contemporary romance set in Dallas, where a married, undercover federal agent dodges the dangerous machinations of a vicious crime syndicate, while uncovering the secrets of her husband and rekindle the passion in their estranged relationship. This story is targeted for the Contemporary Romance or Romantic Suspense genres.

I am a new stay-at-home mother after six years in a full-time sales position. I belong to the Greater Fort Worth Writer’s Group in the Dallas area and have been a long-time enthusiast of romance fiction novels. I am impassioned by and love writing intricate storylines with intriguing twists and realistic characters (including their flaws).

Per your submission guidelines, I have included the first chapter (10pgs) of the manuscript. Please let me know if you would like to see the full manuscript and I would be more than happy to send it to you. I appreciate your time and thank you for considering ‘Under the Covers.’

Kindros said...

This is such a great service you are doing. I'm sure I'll be submitting something to you someday, until then, enjoy the rest of the submissions and have a great weekend.

Amie B said...

awesome susie! will get right on it :)

thanks kindros - hope you have a great weekend, too!

Colene Murphy said...

Oh gosh! I completely mind blanked that you did this! Need to get mine ready for your awesome input asap!

Amie Kaufman said...

My first page is finally ready! Shall I pop it up here to put it in line, or is it first in, best dressed each week?

Amie B said...

please send it amie! i do any and all that i receive! if you'd rather email it, that's good too. amiegr8tstuff (at) aol (dot) com
looking forward to it!

Amie Kaufman said...

Sent!

Noble M Standing said...

Ready for #2?

I am taking a serious boot camp class in May and I need the query blurb and the first ten pages submitted by the end of Jan.

Here goes.

Dear Agent,
Atheist hit man Antony Danic promised to never again shed human blood. Now as Noble Standing, he prefers to fade into the background and live in obscurity as a martial arts instructor and High Elder in training. Even most of the work he does as the Head Elder’s Speaker is from behind a computer screen. When he sees the striking red headed sword master and teacher, he denies any feelings he has for her—even when she expresses an interest in him. He can’t shake the fear that if he gives his heart to another woman she’ll share the same fate as Elite, his first wife. If only he could stop feeling like a monster and shake his past, he might be able to love again. Problem is, Noble isn’t the only one who notices the kick butt, and take names retired agent. When another’s desire for her turns ugly, and everything Noble loves and holds dear is threatened once again, the vow he made is tested.

Latent is the sequel to Emergence and follows Antony Danic, now Noble Standing as he works to live a new life and tries to fix his past decisions. This work of tech suspense is finished at 80,000 words.

LeishaMaw said...

How fun! Not only do we get to read your blog, but we get to see intriguing snatches of future works. :)